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Post by Skribbblie on May 29, 2010 1:49:09 GMT
First to post in the new stories place! I will put my poem back in these stories!
You see a child, naught 10 years old on the nearby balcony. You are at a luxurious hotel on vacation. It is night, and the moon shines brightly on the river just below. The child looks like he sees something over the edge. You ask, "What do you see?" He doesn't answer. He climbs upon the edge to look closer. Suddenly, the guard rail breaks! You desperately call for help, but it is too late. The child falls, breaks his neck, and drowns in the river. You are scarred by what you have seen. Two nights later, you look across the water from the balcony. The memory of what happened is still fresh in your mind. The moon is especially bright tonight. You feel as though you are absorbed into it's haunting reflection. You feel light as a feather, like you are a cloud. You lose control and you yourself plummet to your death. As it goes dark, you think you see the face of the child... The End.
I STILL think this is rather dark.
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Post by artcoursecannon on Jul 15, 2010 12:53:35 GMT
I really like your poem! I mean, yes, it is a little dark, but I found it really captivating. Please write more!
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Post by Skribbblie on Jul 15, 2010 17:09:17 GMT
I plan to.
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